Okay, so I might not exactly have a band of my own...anymore...but I still write music. Last Saturday I finished recording my latest song, The Memory, which should be cut and finished sometime soon. But my question to everyone here is what you all think about some of my songs. I just want you to critic them and tell me what you perceive the meaning as. I'm just looking for a little insight. But please, DO NOT STEAL FROM ME. Thankies

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THE MEMORY

You stood out from the crowd
I couldn't help but to notice
Catch my breath without a sound
Take me away from this moment

Close your eyes just for a while
I'll be back when you miss me

Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Just hold me now

I fell hard by mistake
Times had changed, homes had shattered
You took off like a bullet
Left me here without cover

Close your eyes just for a while
I'll be back if you miss me

Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Just hold me now

Close your eyes, believe in me
Take the dive, I'll be with you
Hold your breath, don't be afraid
We'll make it through in this lifetime

Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Tell me you love me like you used to
And that you want me wherever you are
Promise you'll take away this pain until I find my breath
Just hold me now

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BLIND AND BROKEN

It seems I can't escape my past these days
I keep finding myself getting lost
Struggling across this dissipating line
That I'm finding between now and then
And it's driving me to break
To break this border that lies across my mind
And it's driving me to break
To break this border that lies within me

It surely makes me blind
Not knowing where I am today
Repeating the same mistakes
And it surely makes me blind
To lose myself once again
Repeating the same mistakes

In a world today with no control
I'm forced to find a way to straighten my life
For fear of the return of the old me
Fighting back the way I used to be
And it's driving me to break
To break this border that lies across my mind
And it's driving me to break
To break this border that lies within me

It surely makes me blind
Not knowing where I am today
Repeating the same mistakes
And it surely makes me blind
To lose myself once again
Repeating the same mistakes

This battles in my mind
And I can not give in
I can not surrender to their ways
You left me all alone
But I don't need you here
In desperate times like this I don't need you
Anyways!

It surely makes me blind
Not knowing where I am today
Repeating the same mistakes
And it surely makes me blind
To lose myself once again
Repeating the same mistakes
For you, for you, for you
I'm repeating them, but not for you

This message has been edited. Last edited by: Ashes Burn,

the only thing i didn't get was the line about escaping your pasta. huh?

I think it was supposed to be past, LOL

BTW, we have a poetry thread in General Dis for this stuff. And yes, songs are still poems...

Haha, yeah, it was supposed to be past. I guess I was typing too fast. Opps. And thanks for the heads up about the General Discussion thread.