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Originally posted by teo07:
that was good. did u come up with that off top?

Yeah that was str8 freestyle homie.
Laissez you got a cool ass name and a dope ass flow.
And big ups 2 Danny 4 droppin that truth.

I appreciate the appreciation.

You know whats weird
The game is deep in fear
I need to invest in vests and nines
To say a rhyme thats even nonviolent
So i'm nonrhyming but pro-whining
And I'm lovin it, why?
You don't want it from me, guy.
I spent a G on my company.
With G's worth of truth.
And a G in my crew.
A G on my name's trademark
Dont speak of me in your parts
So dont spark, when i got a G in your park
Geez la Weez!
Even TNT in your car!
And see me spark in the dark
Like me when i start...in superstardom
And pardon me.
Cuz a part of me, has the heart to see
That you ain't as hard as you seem.
And i'm not as soft as you want me to be
Just cuz you want me to be
Won't mean i'll follow suit
I just retaliate in a different route.
I degrade you through a lawsuit
And talk about it, and beat you down in the booth.
I was told to be left alone
Lease it to me
Well knowing me in the zone
Slept on me like zzzz's
And now I'm the one
I dont care if you say i'm arrogant
I use my arrogance for embarrassment
And i dont say it for me
I mean i say it for my self-esteem
And to address it
Take it as a message thats refreshing-freshing-freshing
Or a lesson thats a blessing-blessing-blessing
Like saving me from the stress in my adolescence!

PS i really do appreciate the love and criticism. I write these on the spot to work on my material.

CAUTION!!!
THIS SHIT IS LONG AS HELL!!!
If there's one thing i love to do, its to freestyle. I just happen to do this on AIM. I loved this piece. And if someone happens to read all this, you deserve an award. This is a freestyle i did for like an hour with one of my homegirls. IMO she's much better at poems though.

LF...LF hes my man if he cant do it nobody can...then again men have nothing on us..yet I cant help but find my heart lust...for what could be....yea he could bend me over and do his thing straight up to me.....I have seen things I rather not..taken things on that should not be my lot...my lot in this life....all we do is go through strife..tired of this messed up world......I want an answer its your turn to step up and let the words hurl
is this where you want me to rhyme?
like a cypher?

As i reported
it may not seem as important
but i look on corners
and there are orphans
caution caution
to the nausea of abortions
fatherless lives where do we sort them
and for the life of me
i cant find a critic who's liking me
it may likely be, that i havent served twenty five to life likely
but if so many fans, weren't amped on my grimy lifestyle
for as myself
i've went through hell
and have a few rants under my belt
i'm even engulfed in wealth
my earns burned and melt
so hurt by these words that i felt
so as much as i embellish, i wont tell it, and if i do make, i wont sell it
that would be selfish
for every action that i make, i have tactics to break
every reaction in stealth
written in redaction to tell
i have a bunch of problems i want to A.S.K.
Until they assasinate and rob me like J.F.K.
but i cant hate or live that way
so i may crash like mayday on D-day
and its easy
to be caught up in the he say she say
may lead me
in a completely
leeway, to the dealers up on the freeway
to hear me sing
just like the birds that they keep in the pins
like bowling for illegitimate men
since then, its senseless
at times i dont even get this
at times i feel like i ramble in my sentence
even if i gamble all my chips in
i'm all in
i dont know why i called in
i'm already sick of this
even the wick, with every hocus pocus quote, is enough to make you overdose
no joke, for every rhyme that i'm in
i guess this is when
i give it back to them
ooo but I said and you said...we led the way..we will regret that we walked by the orphans that day....that man on the corner living more real than us..all we had was this thirst and lust...show me..touch me.....its all the same..ya showed me black clouds and taught me to say fuck the rain....I ran that day...to the other side far from the pain...that you caused when you left...ooooo jfk? you werent ever there that day....like all the rest.....you just ran away...
ran from the past...you said you would always come in last
you never saw the things I knew...that there were more to the cards you drew
Maybe the cards i drew it
And my heart i spew it
But i still holler around like those dudes in the pews did
hollering and hooting
saying they'll do shit
But i sorta blocked those thoughts, like the new kids
And i may say what is outlandish
outstanding, standards, that you cant manage
i might not of been there but i've been damaged
even by antics by the black panthers
to expose the truth, and pull the rug from up under you
the dealer deals you a new hand..so go ahead and call all in you are the star...you seen this all before.....ya know the drill its sucks so far
thats what i knew, since i was in underoos
So i had to do what i do, and make some other moves
since i know the drill
i will pillage
and still kill and inflame every village
i guess thats not what you expected, is it?
sorry i did it, i'll be sorry in a minute
cuz of this image, of a suburban exquisite
moves ya have seen...moves ya that through your mind they play..ya want them to fade even if the crime ya have to pay
Not for certain if i'm an urban dentist
i'm still drilling every molar
in every direction like polar
shine throughout the pressure like solar
and still giving middle finger gestures til its over
I saw you as the villian..thats what is in all of us...just didnt know ya would be the one to put up such a fuss
Villian, i am, with penecilin adrenaline
yea say fuck me..then fuck you...the problem is we have been plans but never see i through
To prescribe your life, with benadryl pills in it
plans to make the world a better place....get real its all a sham we just show good face
so yea tell me about the bad the good...wtf? I knew you would
[color:black]So i guess you had me figured out
lets face it we did the best we could...show those diamonds..show your heart...it does not matter...this life we live is far from art
Thoughts, i did them out like an archeaologist
Vodka, i swig it out like an alcoholic
And i'm so vicious like a bear thats maulin
did i mention?
that i'm the guy in Stalin?
The european peeing in all the stalls with
a dixie cup, just so you can pick it up
just in case i wasnt sick enough
I'm here to distinguish
the good from the meanest
The insane from the genius
You cant be as mean as he is
and i mean this
Maybe baby
i've been there done that
then had the dunce cap
all i was interested in, was wheres the lunch at
thats where i could tell my dumb facts
better shake that last drip off....ya think that scares me? all ya did is make me lay back in my loft.....I layed back and I thought of what could be
can you tell, i love that
What it could be?
I could be
another gangster after pranksters in hoodies
doing a two faced facet like the Batman actors
if this world...back to my point..was all it seemed...I have three boys begging for what? more than just me
So dont act like you can match my stature
one wants attention...one wants school..the last one just wants to be left alone...so yea lets see what we can do to knock him off his throne
i am tierd of playing there games trying to take on all their pain
why what the hell is it for.....I told kid 3 there is the door
You can be thrown off of that throne for a bottle of Patron.
I can loan you time alone, but give me my own.
so ya take that worl on..ya think I make this up? your wrong my boys cuz this world more than sucks
More than sucks?
thats more than enough
We all know what you do with them boys on the bus
thats why its lust
and only god i trust
Its too much, women will ruin your life and stuff
will get your own...when it is said....welcome to hell...you will say...I gave up on this fucked up life when I heard the bell
I rock the bell
right next to the jail cells
I rock it well, til those males are on bail
Those same on males who were bound to fail
They ail this old world, attention, read the mail
You and your crews, who
so you can dwell....on the past..all the mistakes..go right ahead...I will think back and say well life may be like good head
head is what i dread
i mean, pain i see
Turn on your T.V.
you heard of A.I.D's?
sometimes you get swallowed..sometimes you get bit...but when you cum you know DAMN THIS IS IT?
you see your mind's poor
so cluttered and conformed
just a victim of utterless porn
now that doesnt mean i dont like a good vid or two
this is it..there may be no more...its called a fucking metaphor
i'm kidding you
but this is what you could get those kids into
it reminds me of a time before
when i met up some whores
i'd get em' and snore
i woke up the next morn
with a bump and a sore
til then, i dont want them no more
well those sores..they have a name..ya passed them on to me cuz your insane
herpies it is..ya went down and ya gots it....now my pussy hurts...I cant even sit
stop it
with all of your lollygagging, you got me laughing off your lollipopping topics
pussy popping, clothes dropping
i know of it
jewelry tom-foolery
our kids..they hate us..we left them..way before we even dreamnt them....we sleep we dream but those are dreams not what it seems
girl you gotta love it
and it seems so serene
tell that to Serene in the back of my Jeep
I'm acting a fool
yes i need an Emmy
Maybe the fool, is the demons in me
to be you and me..what we had...it was like the joey buttafucco dude..I didnt cut your dic..but it was still bad
oh dag
I'd be roaring for days
but things like that have you showing your age
I think in the 80s
i was a baby maybe
so dont think i can recall so easily
into me then you shouldnt be...ya know even with the herpies..ya cant live without me
ya say I am to old..that is not the way I roll..I am the kinda of friend....I will gots your back till the end
I have always seen life for what it is..
So you got my back
You have no idea, how i'd react
friends sometimes do the missing
when I leave and they are alone
stop all your complainling
the never realized what they had blown
plainly i'd rather hear you moan
blown away...a friend lost..yea I was the one in the alley when they tried to kick your ass
Kick my ass?
notice, i was shit faced and crashed
I dont hold a grudge..its not like ya pushed me to the ledge
It would completely be through, if i wasnt surrounded in brew
and i could of got up to defend you
Yes you i would of defended
Yes you i meant it
Having a syringe in every men's appendage
I would obviously ended
Whatever the guys thought they beginned it
if that last word didnt make sense, i bent it
just to make fit it
my rhyming scheme
I'm still way behind on things
but cant really comply on why i try to sing
You see i'm still lingering
Ingenius tinkering
Insert, then out, and follow through with the fingering
Oh what the fuck
i'm saying to much
I know ya want me defeated...yea ya want me to moan..ya want me beat...to bend me over and boan me...my soul is not on loan
Now a million 9 year old boys want to follow and such
Oh stop your groaning
As soon as i call you on my mobile phone
I"ll see you in the morning
Then maybe your ex will storm in
I'm like take her shes horrid
I didnt mean it baby
I save thee, from being beat with extension cords and
no ill be gone ..you'll get my msg machine...this is done...I know that no matter what ya say I have won
knifes to swipe
you can say that you've won
but one on one
i'm the one you want
and if you play me for dumb
i'll drive up in my ford by a quarter to one
ya can step up..I'd like to see it..step up but dont you beleive it
say something! when i'm toteing my gun
beleive that ya ever had me..ya never had me..its a dream..ya just got see
see the life we use to have..pull the trigger...fuck you I have a knife
Play me twice and i wont be so nice
lady i'm crazy, and i want you for my wife
i dont care if i'm right
i've always been left out
i've always been the next doubt
So i coax on my coat
and some more notes i quote
but it won't compare to the bareness i know
You won't believe how i weave
these sentence that i need
like life support thats a fort for me
Most importantly
And not to be skipped
All these words that you spray, is like a day in the mist
sometimes i even enjoy the shit
But all this ranting and raving
with no ecstasy pills
Is like planting and paving
A way for lost dudes with no will
moist for what could of been...oh yea scream and moan...could of should of would of...
put your ass on the floor
quit yapping all your actions, give me rashes
ya lost..ya dropped the ball...now ya sit back..jack off and wonder damn how did I take such a fall
its sorta like my silence to violence
but even as we chat, i happened to catch a virus
no silence is golden..ya been to the movies..o yea we sat in the back row we did some grooving
i cant believe you had the gall to act rude
I'll foil your manners to you decide to act cool
Its like oil i handle my hands crude
rude...honey please...your such a prude
Best believe i rule the siege
never even kissed me on our first date...ya never touch my tits and they are first rate
and you would roo the day you try to mess with me
My tools are all messy see
and I tried to fixed this old mess we weave
I know messy cuz you are left just fucking you
you dont know what to do
even so as i sew your stress to gold
ya walk away wishing..ya never left..
you would never admit i blessed your sou
so i did it i quit
i'm done with this shit
ooo stressed up come on babe ya knew ya werent first rate
you fucking lil bitch
tell it to my face
i'd paint a palet on your face
with a malet from my waist
wait no lets slow the pace
cuz I want you
i call it a little pistol baby
how does it taste?
yea your words have made me second rate
but I dont want to debate
So how do you say, how would you rate it?
Prepare to be there for the meer amazement
You can stand clear right adjacent
to the end of the world that i'm pacing

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OMG....DAMN!!!!!!!!! Y'all ain't holdin' nothin' back. Danny, Laissez, (you ain't chillin' out for nobody. All your shit was hot, man)Mcfly, ....I'm f'n speechless right now. Keep it comin'!! Keep it comin!! This is great!!

Laissez Faire, I'm still reading what you have and it's incredible. I guess Lupe influenced you a lot huh? You ever think about having a career as a rapper? A Ghostwriter, maybe? LOL.

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