This is going to be the first track on my mixtape. It's not mixed, I just wrote and recorded it at home yesterday so it sounds kinda raw it hasn't been mixed or cleaned up at all but I hope ya'll like it. Please give an honest opinion and say what you like and dislike about it so I can make better music because I don't do it for me I do it for ya'll.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/the-cycle-wav.html

Hmm,...my God honest opinion, if you're planning on going professional, work on your delivery, tone and the timing of your hooks and verses. Lyricially, you're alright. But, it's just your timing and all that needs work. Sorry to come down on you but that's my only harsh criticism with it.

Ok I was kinda expecting that i did this in one take just as a raw copy and this is my first crack at using a hook and not just freestylin but I will keep that in mind Honey1015.

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Originally posted by Mr. Marty Mcfly:
Ok I was kinda expecting that i did this in one take just as a raw copy and this is my first crack at using a hook and not just freestylin but I will keep that in mind Honey1015.

It did sound like you were freestyling. But, you're on the right track. Oh, and who gave you that beat? Did you create it yourself or somebody else did? I think it's nice.

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Originally posted by Honey1015:

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Originally posted by Mr. Marty Mcfly:
Ok I was kinda expecting that i did this in one take just as a raw copy and this is my first crack at using a hook and not just freestylin but I will keep that in mind Honey1015.

It did sound like you were freestyling. But, you're on the right track. Oh, and who gave you that beat? Did you create it yourself or somebody else did? I think it's nice.

I got it from Channel Live's Secret Science Rap Album.